The stars have rushed farther into the sky The moon has averted its face Eyes neither look up nor down Just stare The words have been taken away The soul is struck dumb with the hate outside A mind struggles to contemplate One heart does not beat; it is nothing Just pain The wounds have been opened another way Everything so rotten, it goes insane The world’s a wilderness; there are no ways All paths have broken, nothing to do Just remain And wait, wait, wait, dying every day
posted by ATY at 4/03/2005 08:49:00 AM
4 Comments:
Just a moody poem that seems to have been churned out out of sheer compulsion...does it sound a bit harsh? But to be frank, you've written much better stuff before...this one is nothing really to write about...at least i wrote you a comment, that's me at my generous best...
4/05/2005 01:07:00 PM
Your generous best isn't that good blah blah blogger. The poem seems to be fine to me. Yeah she might have produced better stuff but this isn't that bad either. At least the line:
"The world’s a wilderness; there are no ways"
is something I can totally understand. The poem seems forceful enuf to have an effect. You go blah on ur blog a lil 'blah blah blogger.'
4/06/2005 05:41:00 AM
blah_blah_blogger:
do u ever let what soemthing sounds like stop u frm saying it, especially when its the truth? sure i've written better, and i've felt a lot better than the time i wrote this....i guess i was in complete shock at the time, this is all that came out
good girl:
lolzz...thanks for saying that my poem is forceful...but u know blah blah blogger really seems to think that he's been very generous here, so let's give him a lil redit for that
4/08/2005 01:44:00 AM
Quite some reaction...I am surely outnumbered here...
4/08/2005 02:11:00 AM
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